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Band 7

You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: apologise for the damage to the item explain what happened say how you are going to fix the issue

Dear Peter, Hope you're well! I am sending you
this
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 letter with an apology for damaging your book. Do you remember, I have borrowed a book from you
last
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 month? Actually, I was drinking a cup of tea
while
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 reading . Suddenly, I heard a noise from the Kitchen. I was about to stand up when accidentally I spilt the tea on the opened pages. In
this
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 panic situation, I tried to clean the spots with a cloth but it resulted in damaging the text. Now, it is not in readable situation. I do not know, how I can say sorry to you. But to some extent, I am doing my best to fix the damages caused by me. I found a shop which can help me to find the same edition of
book
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, it will take some time. Please give me two months, I will search for the same addition and will hand it to you. Hopefully, you will forgive me. Your friend, Kanchan

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coherence and cohesion
Try to provide a clearer structure by separating the explanation of the incident and the solution into different paragraphs.
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Make sure to use complete sentences and avoid unnecessary fragments to improve clarity.
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Consider using more formal language in parts of the letter to maintain a consistent tone.
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You expressed your apology sincerely, which is important for addressing the situation.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a warm opening and closing, making it friendly and appropriate for the context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Borrowed
  • Unfortunate incident
  • Regret
  • Unintentional
  • Circumstances
  • Remedy
  • Repair
  • Replacement
  • Sincerely
  • Forgiveness
  • Rectify
  • Understanding
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