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The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides key information about the proportion of mobile
phone
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 owners various ways to use their phones. The units are measured in percentages.
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 it is clear from the graph that the highest
phone
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 feature was making calls over the years.
In addition
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, taking photos, receiving text messages and, playing games were the second-highest features.
Whereas
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, recording videos was a minimal amount.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2006, calls made through the
phone
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 were the peak by 100%, send or receive text messages were slightly over 73 per cent, and photos taken around two-thirds.
However
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, other things used on the
phone
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 like games, recording videos and others were low percentages being around 17% to no data. In terms of the year 2008, call maken remained stable.
On the other hand
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, Taken pictures increased by 71%, games jumped from 17% to 42%
also
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, and search the Internet soared from 0% to 41%.
While
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 in 2010, making calls decreased to 99%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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