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The graph shows the number of tourists visiting the Galapagos Islands between 2015 and 2022. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. To zoom in, click on the image.

The graph shows the number of tourists visiting the Galapagos Islands between 2015 and 2022. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. To zoom in, click on the image.
The line graph illustrates how many visitors stayed on islands and cruise ships in the Galapagos islands from 2015 to 2022.
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, the total number of tourists saw a significant increase over the period. Tourists staying on cruise ships grew slightly.
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, people who visited the island went up. They both reached the same
level
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at the end
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 of the period. In 2015, the number of tourists visiting the island started at 0.8
million
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. After that, it remained stable for the following
year
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. In the next two years, the figure showed
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growth to reach around 1.6
million
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 and
plataued
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plateaued
 at almost the same
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 until 2020. Before
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 it declined to approximately 1.4
Million
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 in 2021,
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 it recovered quickly to reach a peak of 1.8
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 in 2022. As far as the number of cruise ship visitors
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 concerned, it began at almost 0.3
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then
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 it rose to approximately 0.6
million
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 in 2016. In 2017, a considerable decline occurred as the figure reached the same
level
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 as the previous
year
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. In the rest of the
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period, it experienced a steady rise
year
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 on
year
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 to reach the same
level
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 as visitors on the island in 2022.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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