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Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapaers or books because they will be to read everything they want online without paying. to what do you extent agree or disagree with this statment ?

Some
people
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 believe that in the future online newspapers and online books
are
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will be
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 common. Paperless
technology
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 shows the benefit in priceless and
user friendly
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. I Partly agree with
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 statement,
due to
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 both sides
have
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having
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 benefits and
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 the drawbacks.
This
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 essay
explore
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reasons
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the reasons
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about
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for
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this
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 statement. The development of
technology
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 has
changes
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people
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people's
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lifestyle
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, they
preferred
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prefer
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 to read online rather than
phisically
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physically
physical
paper
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. The benefit of paperless are easy to read and environmentally friendly. Nowadays,
people
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 like with
somthing
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something
 eco-friendly and
light weight
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lightweight
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 stuff.
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,
people
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loved
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 to enrich their knowledge, so the smartphone is the choice that they always carry on
nor
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for communication or
read
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reading
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. They claimed that electronic
paper
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 is very useful and
give
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gives
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 them new knowledge even in between their hectic activity.
In
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another
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hand
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other hand
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, online papers
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 have
the
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drawbacks,
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,
people
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 sometimes forget that they have downloaded the file. They put it on the storage files,
then
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 never open it again
untill
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until
 a month. After that, they erase
that
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those
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 files
due to
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full
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being full
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 of
storages
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storage
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.
Secondly
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,
printed
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the printed
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paper
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also
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give
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 an aesthetic style
which
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known by touching. I Partly agree that
technology
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 in the future will give
people
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benefit
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benefits
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 with paperless innovation,
people
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 can read both entertainment and knowledge
easier
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easily
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 and everywhere without worries about the price.
However
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, it is not uncommon
that
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people
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forget
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 the files that they already
download
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downloaded
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. In sum, printed
paper
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 and paperless in the future have their own place in order to
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people
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people's
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needed
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needs
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. Even
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technology
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though technology
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 has
change
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changed
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people
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people's
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 cultures and
habit
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habits
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, some of the
traditionals
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traditional
 things
must be
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still exist
due to
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value
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values
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 that can not be replicated
by
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in
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 the modern era.

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task achievement
The introduction should more clearly present your opinion. Explicitly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement, and consider rephrasing the thesis to make it clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs have a clear main idea and logical progression. This will help improve coherence and make your arguments stronger.
task achievement
Try to use more specific examples to support your points. For instance, reference specific studies or statistics about reading habits or paperless technologies.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors, as these can distract from your arguments. Proofreading your work will help with clarity and tone.
task achievement
You included a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of paperless technology, which is a positive aspect.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay follows the standard format of introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which is a good practice for clarity.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital technology
  • accessibility
  • printed materials
  • environmental impact
  • tangibility
  • aesthetics
  • sensory experience
  • demographics
  • market trends
  • interactive content
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