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Band 5.5

Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many think that ecological issues will deteriorate, that it will be impossible to live on our
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 humanity will look for
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 where it would able to continue life. I completely disagree with that opinion
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 it is not possible that
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 will worsen so that we will lose an opportunity to live
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 it and there are no
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 predictions by scientists. Obviously, there are many ecological
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 that people in all countries face,
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, they are not ignored.
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, members of our society, governments and non-governmental organizations try to keep these
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control. Widely spread ecological awareness
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 ecological campaigns help to tackle various environmental issues.
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, officials from different countries sign conventions and multilateral agreements on these issues.
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, the Paris Agreement which was signed by nearly every nation in 2015 is targeting to keep global warming well below 2 Celcium;which justifies ecological
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 are being addressed in order to support life and ensure sustainable development. One more reason why I disagree with the provided statement is the lack of the forecast by scientists. The opinion is based neither on scientific evidence nor on reliable sources. No one actually underestimates the importance of solving and controlling environmental
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, starting with minor ones and ending with majors, understanding how hazardous the consequences of their actions can be. Many actions are being taken in order to prevent environmental degradation on the global level.
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, in 2024, COP 29 took place in Baku where authorities from many countries took part to deliberate and resolve climate change.
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 some believe that worsening environmental
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 will not let human beings continue life on the
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 will arise, I do not agree with the idea because climate change is being controlled in all possible ways and the absence of scientific predictions regarding the question.

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The introduction could be more clearly articulated. Consider rephrasing for clarity and grammatical correctness. For example, 'Many think that ecological issues... where it would be able to continue life.' This can be simplified to 'Many believe that ecological issues will worsen, making it impossible for humanity to live on Earth, leading to a search for other habitable planets.'
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Ensure to support your arguments with clearer examples and explanations. While you mention agreements like the Paris Agreement, elaborating on how these efforts have been effective can strengthen your argument further.
coherence and cohesion
There are some grammatical errors, such as 'the humanity will look for another planet' should be 'humanity will look for another planet.' Check your sentence structures and punctuation to improve readability.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion restates the arguments but could be more compelling. Try to summarize your key points succinctly while reinforcing your main opinion. You could also suggest a positive view of humanity's capacity to adapt and solve environmental issues.
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You acknowledged the existence of environmental problems and the efforts being taken to address them. This demonstrates a balanced view.
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You provided relevant examples, such as the Paris Agreement and COP 29, which strengthen your argument by illustrating that efforts are being made to tackle environmental issues.
coherence and cohesion
Your position is clear throughout the essay, which helps the reader understand your stance on the issue.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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