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Time: 40 minutes In many countries, shops open for longer hours daily every week. What is the negative or positive effects of this on the shoppers and local community. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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opens
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shopes
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both opinions.
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be that said some
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opening the
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shoppes
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 is that will support the citizens and tourism
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 vacation I arrived at midnight and I saw many
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restaurants
,
supermarket
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supermarkets
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,malls,
pharmacy
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shopes
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fruits
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shops
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 sales for the
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shopes
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shop
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 time at especially in weakened. Will bring a lot of customers . On
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conversely
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 conceit other
people
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shops
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.to clarify
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night
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 dangerous to citizens and travelers
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people
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not
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 for their actions.More ever it will not save for the
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shopes
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shop
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open
 at midnight.Another important point I suggest for the government allows for the
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shops
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shop
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shops
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shop
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shops
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,
small
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and small
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shop
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shops
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 and can make it
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 to the customers.
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people
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foe\r
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the
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night
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 shopping is an argumentative topic with different opinions from my perspective I concur that
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partially
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partly
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shopes
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shoppes
shops
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incense
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 as for Madicatin drugs for sick
people
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 and a small supermarket
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shopes
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shoppes
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coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas by using clearer transitions between points and ensuring each paragraph connects to your thesis.
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Make sure your introduction clearly presents your main argument more explicitly and provides an overview of the points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Work on grammar and spelling to enhance clarity, particularly in the usage of words and structures. This will greatly improve your overall score.
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You have provided personal experience, which is a strong technique to support your arguments and engage the reader.
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Your essay shows an awareness of different perspectives on the topic, which is excellent for demonstrating critical thinking.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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