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Band 4.5

Some people believe that planing for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Many individuals think that making arrangements for the forthcoming is wasteful
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 , others say that they have to focus on the current era.
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 disagree with the above statement, In the following
paragrphs
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, I will highlight my personal views which will lead
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a
logicial
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logical
 conclusion. The first and foremost reason is that planning is the way to make a person successful in their
life
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. in today's world it it is important for everyone that people make
a good plans
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a good plan
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to
achive tneir
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achieve their
 goals . if they do not think they care it leads to problems in their activity in many ways . to explain
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 , it is true that
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this
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 era, everything is too expensive so if
person
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a person
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 spend large amounts of money on useful things they do not get
successful
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a successful
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 man in their
life
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 because they already know that today's condition that every
things
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 is more costly .
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, when they buy something which is unnecessary they do not get it.it is not only beneficial for their coming but
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 current
life
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 . probing ahead , without arrangements people can not survive. if they make a plan they can desire goals.
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,
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 was set a goal that
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 have to achieve 80% in 12 classes to get admission in
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apply
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abroad for my higher education so
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 completed my goal .
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, whenever people can make a goal in their
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 they can manage both approaching affairs and
present
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the present
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 date because they set up their minds
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 their agenda.
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, having good appointments is helpful for the imminent so that a person can make a good balance between their present time and coming.

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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
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language
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language
Avoid repetition of phrases and try to vary your vocabulary to make your essay more interesting.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic and express it at the beginning of the essay.
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You provide a personal example, which adds strength to your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • unexpected expenses
  • career advancement
  • long-term goals
  • structured approach
  • personal development
  • educational goals
  • fulfilling life
  • spontaneous experiences
  • emotional fulfillment
  • embrace opportunities
  • mental health
  • reduce stress and anxiety
  • mindfulness
  • balanced approach
  • flexibility and adaptation
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