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Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents’ responsibility, while others think it should be the government’s duty. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The
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resposibility
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responsibility
of
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for
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 street hygiene is the most important for
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a heathy
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heathy
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healthy
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 neighbourhood.
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 some
people
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 believe that residences
are
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have
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 having big
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resposibility
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responsibility
 to make
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the street
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street
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streets
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 still clean, others argue that
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government
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the government
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 is the actor that should clean all of the
street
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streets
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,
such
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make
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making
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 a regulation for clean service.
This
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 essay will discuss both
perspective
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perspectives
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 before I give my own opinion. On the one hand, life in a clean neighbourhood is a residence dream. Many benefits they can obtain,
firstly
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, in healthy
circumtances
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circumstances
people
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 will grow up in
a
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good quality
of
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the
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apply
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air. Especially for children who need fresh air
for
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to
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 develop their lungs.
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, environmental
clean up
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clean-up
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 could be done alternately between
residence
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residences
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. So, the
cleaness
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cleanness
clearness
 of
neighbourhood
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a neighbourhood
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 can be
maintaned
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maintained
 every single day.
Secondly
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, the
residence
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residents
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 who
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are direcly
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direcly
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directly
 involved
to clean
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in cleaning
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 the area will
have
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have to
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 feel ownership of the
environment
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. They will clean as hard as they can to make
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a healty
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healty
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healthy
environment
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.
In
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 the other hand,
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government
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the government
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also
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 have
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the resposibility
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resposibility
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responsibility
 to make all the environmental
keep cleaning
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clean
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.
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Government
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The government
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 has
cleaning
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a cleaning
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 service in every region, so they can utilize the
employee
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employees
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 to clean
all
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apply
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the
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environment
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. Some
people
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 believe that tax which
always
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is always
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 paid to the country will be utilized to make the
environment
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 clean. In my opinion, both society and
government
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 have the same
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resposibility
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responsibility
 in keeping clean the
environment
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. I agree that
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government
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the government
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 has
regulation
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regulations
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 to make
clean
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apply
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the country,
however
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,
people
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 should
relize
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realize
realise
 that the services will not come every day, so the
resident
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residents
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also
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 have
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the resposibility
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resposibility
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responsibility
to clean
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for cleaning
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 the
environment
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. In sum, awareness should be built and
do
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not just rely
government
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. Even
there
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though there
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 is a program from the
center
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centre
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 about keeping
clean
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apply
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the
environment
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,
people
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 as
a
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apply
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resident
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residents
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 must

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language
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammar errors. For example, 'residences' should be 'residents' and 'cleaness' should be 'cleanliness.'
structure
Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to make main ideas obvious.
content
Add specific examples or personal experiences to support your points better.
content
You provide a balanced discussion of both views, which is important in IELTS essays.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsibility
  • government
  • clean
  • tidy
  • residents
  • neighbourhood
  • duty
  • argue
  • maintain
  • community
  • pride
  • pick up
  • litter
  • plant
  • flowers
  • public spaces
  • relationships
  • resources
  • implement
  • schedules
  • bins
  • waste
  • organise
  • events
  • taxation
  • shared
  • benefit
  • everyone
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