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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Spending in Thousand Pound Sterling

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Spending in Thousand Pound Sterling
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amount
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the amount
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 spent on six consumer items in four
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European
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european
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European
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area
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areas
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Overall
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, it can be seen that
photographic
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the photographic
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 file in
Britain
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 showed A
significant
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 highest chart
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then
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than
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 the
toys
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 during the stage,
while
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 the perfumes and the tennis
racquest
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racquet
racquets
 in Germany experienced a
twiend
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twined
twin
trend
 trend body 1 In detail, the photographic in
Britain
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 were 170 and
Toys
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 almost 167 respectively in
Britain
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 as
highest
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the highest
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 country in
these area
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this area
these areas
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 went up sharply through the period, reaching more than
others
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other
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 countries by the end of the period. in the meantime, the photographic and
toys
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 in France increased to 165 and 157, but it experienced remained in
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Italy
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italy
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Italy
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 until 157 as
comptition
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competition
.
in
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Perfumes
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the Perfumes
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 and Tennis racquets area in
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Italy
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italy
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Italy
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 from regular
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complete
comptite
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compared
 to stronger , it experienced a gradual increase to more than
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France
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in france
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france
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France
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 and continued with a gradual rise in Personal stereos 150 body2 moving
on
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to
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germany
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Germany
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, in
early
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 dropped, the CDs and
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Toys
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Toy
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 goods
was
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 the lowest among the all countries it was
excaliy
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approximately
 145 twice as much as nill calls.
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, it sharply declined to 147 by Personal stereos, recording the lowest percentage, compared to the other areas.
likewise
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, there was a rise of CDs
as
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to
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 165 in
Britain
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,
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 but was still the highest end of the period for all
spechlists
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specialists

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Vocabulary: Replace the words britain, toys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending
  • amount
  • consumer goods
  • countries
  • highest
  • lowest
  • trends
  • habits
  • cultural
  • economic
  • analyze
  • compare
  • overall
  • differences
  • most
  • least
  • category
  • thousand
  • pound
  • sterling
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