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The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
The table illustrates the three different items consumers spend on in 5 different
countries
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, Ireland, Italy, Spain,
Sweden
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 and Turkey in 2002.
Overall
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, all 5
countries
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 have a similar tendency that they consume the most for Food, Drinks and tobacco.
In contrast
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, they spend the least on Leisure and Education. In the sector of Food/Drinks/Tobacco, all 5
countries
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 spend the most among the three different sectors, especially in Turkey. One-third of the Turkish consumers consumed food, beverages and tobacco,
while
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 in
Sweden
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, only a quarter of people spent on
this
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category
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. Ireland is placed as the second largest consumer in
this
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category
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, which accounts for 28.91%, followed by Italy, which makes up 0.59%, larger than
Sweden
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. Focus on the least spending
category
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, Leisure and Education. Among the five
countries
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, Turkey spent the most in
this
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category
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 as well, accounting for 4.35%. Followed by 3.22% of
Sweden
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, just 0.02% less than
Sweden
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, for Italy.
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, 2.21% of Ireland came second from the bottom, and ultimately, Spain consumed the least, which makes for 1.98%.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, sweden, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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