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Researchers shoes that people now day sleepless than they used to in the past what does you think is the reasons behind this? what are the effect on individual and society?

pepole
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People
 sleep fewer
hours
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 than they did many years ago.
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 is because we tend to
work
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 for long
hours
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 compared to the past and
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is
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results in
exhusting
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exhausting
exhaustion
.
Pepole
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People
 tend to sleep less compared to
past
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the past
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 because they spend more
time
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 at
work
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.
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 is because of market
ploicies
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policies
.They should do extra
work
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 and for
long
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a long
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 average
time
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 and have to get more done
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tasks,
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and mision
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mision
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mission
.
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 why employee
under
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the
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strees
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trees
stress
streets
 all the
time
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 and that can make them
streesful
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stressful
 and can not
mange
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manage
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 their sleep
time
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.
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recent
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 study showed that the average employee
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worked
 for 24
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 more than the average
workers
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 in
the
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1970. The primary effect of
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 issue
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lead
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individuals nowadays sleepless.
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 huge
adminstrations
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administrations
 make their
plocies
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policies
places
 above 8
hours
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 at
work
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 results in
high
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 percentage of them being too tired to live their lives
effectivley
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effectively
.
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 could lead to serious health
proplems
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problems
such
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 as
,
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strees
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stress
,and anxiety
attack
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attacks
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 that officially lead to sleep issues.
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, I
work
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 under
shift
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 system
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that is
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mean
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 four days versus four days and the average
time
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 to
work
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 is above 8
hours
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instead
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 of my past
work
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1
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week versus 1 week
that
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mean
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means
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i
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I
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 get more rest and live my
lives
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life
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 effectively in my past wok than my current job. In conclusion. People are more
deprivation
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deprived
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 than in
previous
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the previous
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 generation because of the longer
work
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hours
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 and that
effect
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affects
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 their health and
that
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apply
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could lead them
suffer
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to suffer
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 from tired
and
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anxiety and being under
strees
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stress
trees
 issues .

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language
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. Words like 'people' and 'exhausting' are important to get right.
coherence
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Add more specific examples and details to support your points more effectively.
coherence
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content
You have identified important reasons for sleep deprivation and some effects on individuals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sleep
  • stress
  • technology
  • anxiety
  • modern life
  • working hours
  • lifestyle
  • social activities
  • distractions
  • people
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