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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided pie charts illustrate the average household expenditures in two countries of Asia, Japan and Malaysia in the calendar year 2010. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, the charts provided give information on expenses towards multiple categories
such
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 as food,
healthcare
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, transportation, housing, and other goods and
services
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.
Firstly
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, In Malaysia, it can be concluded from the given information that people spend the least on
healthcare
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 (3%) and most of their
income
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 goes towards housing facilities (35%) . At the same time, the Japanese spend the least on
healthcare
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services
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 (6%) and they spend a lot of money on other
services
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 (29%).
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, it can be deduced from the given information that both nations spend significantly lower amounts of
income
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 on
healthcare
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services
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.
On the other hand
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, we can come to the conclusion that food is the category where both the countries spend almost equal amount of their incomes. In the case of transportation, Malaysians spend less when compared to Japanese. To summarize the data, health care is a segment where both nations spend a negligible amount of their
income
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, and surprisingly Japanese spend around 29% of their
income
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 towards other
services
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.
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, we can conclude that housing expenses in Malaysia which is 35% are significantly higher than in Japan (21%).

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words healthcare, services, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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