1.Some people believe that children can learn effectively by watching TV and they should be encouraged to watch TV both at school and at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the new
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, how we
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it and accept it is still dependent on the human race. Technology being the
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and other advancements have been a crucial part of the development of
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society.
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being said we will look at its positive and negative aspects on how effective is
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in teaching
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children
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and whether or not
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should be employed at school for teaching. Learning
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children
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is a very critical and important step in
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life for their
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development
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being said
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is an effective medium for teaching
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how to speak and listen as the visuals and
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schemes used in the
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channels grasp their attention leading the
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to pay attention to the screen and
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the information being provided to them.
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, one can argue that
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motor skills are developed by learning in school where they have to physically
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the elements provided at school and try to solve the
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given at hand which helps them to
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their creative thinking. In conclusion
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would like to disagree that
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is a good medium for learning as students from a young age if
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introduced
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can have adverse effects as their attention span will be very limited
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no or less development of motor skills will cause them issues in mobility and the
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of real life elements.

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task response
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. You could say 'I disagree' directly on whether TV is a good learning tool.
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Try to use more examples to support your points, like mentioning specific TV shows that are educational.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your paragraphs better. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea to make your essay clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar. Mistakes like 'fututre' and 'simultaneoulsy' can distract the reader.
task achievement
You discussed both sides of the argument, mentioning both the benefits and drawbacks of TV for learning.
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Your conclusion clearly states your opinion on the topic, which is important for the reader.

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