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The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts details about the railway transport in four countries in 2007. It
include
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,
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Malaysia
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,
Canada
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,
China
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 and
UAE
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. After analysing the table, it can be seen that
,
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Malaysia
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 and the
UAE
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has
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 negligible
diffrence
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differences
of
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 people who
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a train
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train
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 as
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transportation. The
malaysia
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 and
UAE
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 have
nearly
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 identical
number
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 of passenger
kilometers
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 per
head
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 of
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population
, 770 KM per
head
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 in
Malaysia
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 and 780 in the
UAE
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. As per the data, 22.2
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billions
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 of
tons
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 cargo
carried
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in to
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the
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Malaysia
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while
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UAE
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has
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 21.9
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billions
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 of
tons
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 cargo.
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 27 million people
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China
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 used rail transport in the year 2007 and 1980 pessengers KM per
head
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 of population, making it the highest trend among all the four countries.
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Canada
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 only 0.3 million population who
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train
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trains
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 and 80
pessengers
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passengers
 KM per
head
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China
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 carried 23.01
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billions
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 of
tons
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 cargo and
the
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Canada
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 carried 5.20
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billions
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of
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tons
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 more than
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China
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China
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 have the highest numbers
pf
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travelers
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 and passengers
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the
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Canada
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 the lowest numbers in all categories.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, canada, china, uae, head, billions, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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