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The chart below shows the number of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of
adult
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visitors
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,
visitors
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 aged under 15, and special
exhibition
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visitors
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 to a museum from 1997 to 2017.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of
adult
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visitors
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 was significantly higher than other types of
visitors
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 in all 15 years.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of special
exhibition
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visitors
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 was the lowest. In 1997, the proportion of
adult
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visitors
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 was considerably high with about 200,000. Compared to
visitors
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 who were under 15 years old, they were around 170,000.
Whereas
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 the figure for special
exhibition
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visitors
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 was only 78,000, which made them the lowest one. By 2002, almost all three types of
visitors
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 experienced a slight increase except the
number
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 of young people, which went from 170,000 to 110,000.
While
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 the
adult
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visitors
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’
number
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 rose by approximately 210,000 and the
number
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 of special
exhibition
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visitors
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 went up by about 12,000. In 2007, the
number
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 of
adult
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visitors
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 increased sharply to 400,500. The same pattern was seen in special
exhibition
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visitors
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, which grew to 37,700.
On the contrary
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, the
number
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 of people under 15 who visited the museum decreased to roughly 27,000. In 2017, there was a small decline in the
number
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 of adults and
visitors
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 under 15 with only 380,000 and 82,300 respectively,
however
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, the special
exhibition
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visitors
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’
number
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 rose to 42,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, adult, visitors, exhibition with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number
  • visitor
  • museum
  • overall
  • peak
  • increase
  • low
  • adults
  • school groups
  • senior citizens
  • period
  • main audience
  • comparisons
  • features
  • suggesting
  • growth
  • programs
  • years
  • initial
  • showing
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