You had a dinner with your friend’s family. Write a letter to your friend and express your fillings about the dinner. In your letter, you should include: Say what you enjoyed at the dinner Describe how you feel about his/her family Invite your friend and his family to your place

Dear Harpreet, I am writing
this
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letter to share my experience at
dinner
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the dinner
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which I had with your family.
To begin
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, the food of the restaurant was amazing in taste and I enjoyed it
alot
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a lot
.
Also
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, the
secenic
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scenic
view near the bar area was stunning.
Moreover
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, I enjoyed the melodious
vilon
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violin
vison
show which was organised by
manager
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the manager
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. Talking about your family, your father
got
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has
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some
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an
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excellent sense of humour. I really got
fan
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a fan
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of his jokes.
In addition
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, I enjoyed
alot
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a lot
the company of your whole family because of their wonderful nature.
Furthermore
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, my birthday is approaching next month on
13th
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the 13th
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and I would like to give
invitation
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an invitation
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for
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to
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the dinner party at my house
to
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for
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your whole family. So, once again we can get a chance to sit together and have a magnificent experience.
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, our families can meet with each other. I hope you and your family will join me at my birthday party. Yours lovingly, Karan

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer paragraphs. Start a new paragraph when you change ideas.
task achievement
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. For example, 'alot' should be 'a lot', and 'vilon' should be 'violin'.
positive
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is great for the context.
positive
You provided specific details about the dinner, which makes your letter more interesting.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • heartwarming experience
  • culinary delights
  • familial warmth
  • cordial atmosphere
  • intriguing conversations
  • reciprocal invitation
  • cultural exchange
  • personable interactions
  • memorable hospitality
  • fostering connections
  • warm welcome
  • thoughtful gestures
  • engaging discussions
  • positive impact
  • strengthen the bond
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