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the table below gives information about the underground railway systems in 6 countries

the table below gives information about the underground railway systems in 6 countries
the table compares the underground railway systems in 6 cities, highlighting their opening dates, route lengths and annual passenger numbers .
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 , the data shows a clear relationship between the age of
rhe
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the
 systems and its scale and visitors. Older networks like London, Paris and Tokyo are more extensive and best utilized. London's
system
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, established in 1863 as the first and older among the
others
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other
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underground railways, boasts the most extensive network of 394
kilometers
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kilometres
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.
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, with 775
million
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 annual
passengers
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, it ranks third in usage. Paris, opened in 1900, demonstrates remarkable efficiency with its
199 kilometers
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199-kilometre
system
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, transporting 1,191
million
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passengers
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 yearly. Tokyo's metro, though younger (1927) and more compact (155 km), leads first place with an impressive 1,927
million
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 annual riders. The American systems show contrasting pictures :Washington DC's 1976 metro serves 144
million
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passengers
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 across 126 km,
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 Los Angeles's newer
system
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 (2001) remains underutilized with just 50
million
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 annual riders on 28 km of track. In Japan Kyoto's small
11-kilometers
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11-kilometre
system
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, opened in 1981, handles only 45
million
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passengers
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words system, million, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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