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Band 4.5

THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD SPEND MORE BUDGET FOR FREE INTERNET ACCESS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

There has always been a controversy regarding whether or not a government should spend more budget for easier internet access across the country. Many
people
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 argue that the government should increase its spending on Wi-Fi,
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 many others hold opposing views. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree to the statement. First and foremost, I believe that the widespread of coronavirus had caused a huge chaos for the economy and businesses -
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 as economic inactivity and unemployment growth rate. Raising the amount of money spent on internet can help improve the accessibility of
people
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 to communicate and work without having to come into contact.
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 will not only help reduce the number of infected
people
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 but
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 allow the economy activity to rise.
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, an inexpensive internet access can lead to higher quality of life as
people
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 are able to obtain education and knowledge through an online website, which can assist
people
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 in everyday life
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 the COVID-19 lockdown.
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,
people
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 may find it more convenient to use the computer or online device to gain information rather than going to the library.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your main argument in the introduction and conclusion. This will help your reader understand your position better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words or phrases to connect your ideas. This will make your essay easier to follow.
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples or reasons to support your points. This will make your argument stronger.
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The essay has a clear position and agrees with the statement.
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You have mentioned real-world issues like COVID-19, which makes your argument relevant.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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