You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good you want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer.

Dear Ananya, Hope you receive my letter in the best of spirits.
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night, I attended your signing concert held at Square One. I am writing
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letter to appreciate your singing talent. I am a student of chemistry
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and have just done with exams
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week. It was a very hectic and stressful time, so, one of my friends insisted to go for
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event as music is one of the best ways to relax our minds.
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, we booked your show tickets
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, and it really proved worthwhile to us. It was my first experience to attend any music program. I do not have words to express my happiness for your ineffable singing talent. You really helped me to rejuvenate myself. And I'm pretty sure, all the audience would experience the same as me. I am eagerly waiting for your next concert in my town or nearby city.
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really grateful to you for providing
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a wonderful experience that
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my mind. Yours sincerely, Kanwalpreet Kaur.

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The introduction is good, but you can make it more personal by including a specific detail about the concert.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas better by using linking words like 'also' or 'moreover'.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure every paragraph focuses on one main idea. The last paragraph has a mix of ideas that could be clearer.
tone
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is great for a personal letter.
task achievement
You express your feelings about the concert very well, showing your enjoyment clearly.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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