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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphics display the amounts of
money
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 spent in different areas by the local gove rnment in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, in both 2010 and 2015, the greatest expenditures by the government were in education, health care, pensions, and defence.
In addition
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, in 2015, there was an increase in the expenditure on welfare. The government invested the least
money
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 in interest, transport, culture, and other areas in both years. In 2010, the greatest proportions of
money
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 were for education and health care, with almost a quarter of the proportion in both cases. Defence and pensions had expenditures of 17% and 19%, respectively. Welfare, interest, transport, and culture had the lowest proportions of
money
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 with 8%, 5%, 3%, and 2%, respectively.
According to
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 the 2015 data, investment in education
were
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 reduced by 3% compared to 2010. The amounts of
money
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 spent on health care and pensions were the same as in 2010. The
money
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 for defence decreased by 3%. Welfare and interest doubled in proportion compared to 2010, reaching 13% and 10%. The investment
on
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in
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 transport, culture, and other areas
were
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 reduced to half of their previous proportions.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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