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You recently attended a series of English lessons in a language school. However, you were unhappy with the teaching quality. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter: • explain why you chose to study English at the school • describe the problems you had with the lessons • suggest how the classes could be improved

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
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 dissatisfaction with the teaching quality of your school. I have attended your school for one month to learn the
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 lessons of English. I am
a
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 international student in Canada and English wasn't my first language so I decided to
enchance
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mistakes
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 during
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 holidays. I searched on
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 and found your school near to my house.
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, decided to take admission.
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 doing registration, the ways to deliver the lessons were different when I started attending
classes
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, there
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 than 20 students in one class and
classes
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 were only for one hour in a day. It was not possible to solve every student's problems. I didn't
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 these
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 beneficial
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 the way of teaching was very unuseful. I hope
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 of students will be divided into groups and can attend
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 in small numbers
this
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 can help to improve the quality.
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by
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providing more and clear information by tutors to learners can help to understand the concepts of lessons. I look forward to your prompt reply. Yours Sincerely, Saij.

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task achievement
Try to explain your reasons more clearly, especially why you chose the school and how it can be improved.
coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a single main idea and stay focused on it.
cohesion
Use simple linking words like 'first', 'second', 'also', to connect your ideas better.
task achievement
You clearly stated your main concerns about the teaching quality.
suitable writing tone
You used a polite tone throughout the letter.
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