You have borrowed something from a friend and it got damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Apologize for the damage. - Explain what happened. - Suggest how to resolve the issue.

Dear Preet, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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letter to you to express my apology for the item that I broke
last
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Saturday; moving
further
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,
this
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item is your favourite
flower
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vase, which is very expensive and you purchased it in Italy.
Additionally
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,
Last
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week, when you were not at home, I took care of the dog Shaffy;
However
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, I was new to Shaffy, so he was afraid of me and ran here and there, and suddenly his foot slipped and he fell into a
flower
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vase and broke it. I tried hard to protect
this
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item, but all has gone in vain. Frequently, I acknowledge that it was my mistake, and I would like to rectify it by paying for it.
Moreover
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, next week, my father will be going to Europe, and I am asking him to buy a similar
flower
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pot for you, or if you want, I can pay you the price of the
flower
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pot. Once again, I’m sorry for the inconvenience and appreciate your understanding. Warm regards, Manpreet

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate the paragraphs clearly to enhance readability.
task response
Add more details about the vase to make the apology more sincere.
suitable writing tone
You maintained a polite and friendly tone throughout the letter.
complete response
You clearly explained the incident and took responsibility for the damage.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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