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The graph below shows the top 5 grossing films in both the United States and United Kingdom in the year 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the top 5 grossing films in both the United States and United Kingdom in the year 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph below displays the top 5 grossing
movies
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 in the United States and the
UK
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 in 2021. Noteworthy trends can be observed from the graph. It can be clearly seen that the five highest
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revenue generating
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movies
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 in the
USA
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 were different than in the
UK
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.
Furthermore
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, the total
revenue
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 from all films in the
USA
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 was much higher than
the
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in the
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UK
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.
Firstly
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, the
revenue
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 of the top five grossing
movies
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 exceeded $150
million
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 by a significant amount in the
USA
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. Shang-Chi and Venom were the top two at over $200
million
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.
In contrast
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, in the
UK
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 the most watched movie was
Spider man
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, with a
revenue
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 of only $
100million
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100 million
.
Secondly
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, there was a huge variation between the top movie’s
revenue
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 in the
UK
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 and the other four of more than $60million. Whilst,
this
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 trend was not the case in
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USA
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the USA
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 where all the other four
movies
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 except the top one
where
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were
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 close to each other in terms of
revenue
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.
Overall
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, the
top grossing
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top-grossing
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revenue
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 between UAS and
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UK
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the UK
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 showed huge differences where the first one in
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UK
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the UK
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 was
Spider man
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Spider-Man
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while
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 in
US
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the US
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 Chang-Chi.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, uk, revenue, usa, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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