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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The diagram illustrates the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to a Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 increased significantly throughout the period.
While
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 the
number
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 of cruise ship
tourists
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 fluctuated in the early years before rising steadily, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 staying on the
island
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 grew more consistently. In 2010, 250,000
visitors
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 stayed on cruise ships.
This
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number
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 slightly increased to 0.5
million
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 in 2011. At the same time, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 remained stable at around 1
million
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. After a slight decline, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 staying on cruise ships peaked at 2
million
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 in 2017. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 staying on the
island
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 rose sharply from 0.75
million
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 to 1.5
million
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 between 2011 and 2017. In total, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting the Caribbean
island
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 rocketed from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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 over the period from 2010 to 2017.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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