Many people nowadays spend a large of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

There is no denying the fact that society spends a large amount of time using comperes and a
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why
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the effects behind
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choice as positive impact or negative.
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with, there are many
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for
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spend the majority of their free time on a
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, the idea of how
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you can access and handle the enjoyable things you want to do.
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, you have the choice to choose, and
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people
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find it as a connivant thing.
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, the internet plays a big role in
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sector.
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, nowadays it is easy to any information in the world
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you are sitting at home, so because these
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find it much comfortable, and
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video games are one of the
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for spending a large amount of time on their
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In terms of advantages and disadvantages, in my opinion, I feel it has more disadvantages than advantages, it is possible to say that, watching a screen for so long will cause health problems
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as red eye and increasing in weight in the community.
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, one of the
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that
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do not think about
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is avoiding real-life problems.
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, most
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people
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in societies have personal problems in their lives and because of a
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, they start to avoid them until
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become bigger and bigger. In conclusion, there are many
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door and it is hard to find a common ground, and I believe that we need to find answers to solve
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Make sure to clearly state your main points in each paragraph. This helps the reader understand your ideas better.
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Try to link your ideas smoothly between sentences and paragraphs. This makes your essay easier to follow.
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Use specific examples to support your points. This adds strength to your argument and makes your essay more convincing.
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You have identified reasons for smartphone use which is a good start for your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your thoughts clearly, which is positive for overall clarity.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Connectivity
  • Multifunctionality
  • Instant gratification
  • Digital natives
  • Cybersecurity concerns
  • Social isolation
  • Ergonomic issues
  • Technological addiction
  • Virtual communities
  • E-learning
  • Telecommuting
  • Screen time
  • Digital detox
  • Mobile applications
  • User interface
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Information overload
  • Carpal tunnel syndrome
  • Procrastination
  • Phubbing (ignoring someone in favor of a mobile phone)
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