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The diagram below shows the structure of solar panels and its use.

The diagram below shows the structure of solar panels and its use.
The presented pictures indicate the structure of
a
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solar panels and how it is used. A detailed analysis reveals
that
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what
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 at first how a simple solar
panel
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 look like. It has a square shape.
Upper
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The upper
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side
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 has a
trandparent
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transparent
glass
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, and on the upper left
side
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 there is
a
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an
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inlet
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 and on the bottom right
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side
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 there is an
outlet
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.
Second
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The second
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 diagram indicates that transparent
glass
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 does receive all the sunrays and
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inlet
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the inlet
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, situated on the
left hand
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left-hand
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side
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,
collect
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collects
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air
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 and
transfer
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transfers
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this
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air
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 to the transparent
glass
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, where
this
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air
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become
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becomes
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 warm and
ultimaltely
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ultimately
went
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goes
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 outside through
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outlet
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the outlet
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.
On
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In
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 the third picture, sunrays are stored on the upper
side
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 of the
panel
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,
likewise
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 second diagram, and
this
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 time
instead
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 of
air
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, water is entered through
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inlet
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the inlet
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 and
came
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comes
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 out from the
outlet
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 in
form
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the form
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 of warm water.
Overall
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, a simple solar
panel
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 just include a transparent
glass
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,
inlet
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 and
outlet
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. When
air
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 or water are fed
in to
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into
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 the
panel
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, they come out in the warm form.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words panel, side, glass, inlet, outlet, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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