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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.
The provided pie charts give information about the proportion of various six average household expenditures in 1950 and 2010 in a country. A detailed analysis reveals a negligible difference in the share of
education
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the education
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 sector by families across
both
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 given years, 6.6% and 6.3% respectively. 2.4% was spent on
the
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health care in 1950,
while
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this
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 figure was twofold after sixty years.
Housing
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The housing
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 sector has indicated a line share in the first given
year
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 72.1%, whilst in 2010
this
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 figure was far less
only
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than only
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 22%. Regarding
the
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all other forms,
although
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food
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the food
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 section was 11.2% in the former
year
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, it increased by 21% in the
year
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 2010. As for transportation and other forms of
expenditures
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expenditure
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 were concerned,
both
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 were just under 5% in the former
year
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 but
both
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 were strikingly increased in 2010, and remained just under 20%.
Overall
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, expenditures
on
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in
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 the housing sector
was
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were
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 dominant in 1950,
whereas
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food
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the food
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 section had
highest
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the highest
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 fraction in 2010. Interestingly, money spent on transportation was
least
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the least
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 prevalent in
both
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 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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