I'm writing an IELTS essay for this question: Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through another media platform. Discuss both views.

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people
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a video on TikTok about
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the media the best ways to act
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care of themselves more than
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some
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think that
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newspapers
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in the
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you an example using a lot of papers will harm the
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,
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some
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may prefer
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others like to use traditional ways.
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of the day, both of them
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there
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any
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Make sure your introduction clearly states the two sides of the argument.
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Improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs to help the reader follow your argument.
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Use clear and well-structured examples to support your points, avoiding spelling and grammar mistakes.
coherence and cohesion
Try to summarize your points better in the conclusion to show a clear end to your argument.
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You show the two views of the topic in your essay.
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Your examples are relevant and connect to the points you make.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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