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Band 2.5

The process below shows how to make dough for a pizza.

The provided diagram gives information about how pizza
dough
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 is made. To initiate, four ingredients
such
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 as 500 grams
flour
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of flour
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, 325 grams
water
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of water
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, 2
tea spoon
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teaspoon
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salt
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of salt
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, and 1/2
tea spoon
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teaspoon
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dry
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of dry
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 yeast are put into a stand mixer. Afterwards, all these ingredients are mixed in a machine for 2 minutes
on
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in
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 slow motion.
Following
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this
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,
same
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the same
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 mixture is mixed for
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further
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a further
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 5 minutes at medium mode.
Subsequently
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,
same
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 mixture is again mixed for 2 minutes at slow mode. After mixing from
machine
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the machine
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,
prepared
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the prepared
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 raw
dough
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 is left for two hours and after two hours, interestingly,
this
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 raw
dough
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turned
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turns
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 into
double
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a double
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 size.
On
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In
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 the second
last
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 stage, by using
hands
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their hands
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 workers remove all air bubbles, and
finally
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 cut
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this
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them
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in
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into
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 3 equal pieces or 275 grams.
Overall
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, the provided process diagram is categorised into seven principal stages, commencing with the collection of ingredients, proceeding to the mixing phase, and
at the end
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 prepared
dough
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 is cut into equal pieces.

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The description of the mixing process is clear and easy to understand.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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