Prompt: In some countries, people are choosing to live alone more often than in the past. Why do you think this is happening?Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In recent years, there has been an increasing trend of people choosing to live alone more often than in the past.
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phenomenon might be explained
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the significant changes that we are facing as a modern society. Some factors
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as globalization, the rise of more competitive markets, the specialization and creation of new jobs, the entrance of women into the workforce and feminism; an increasing worldwide supply of top talent, and the birth of the internet with its powerful connectivity to mention a few, have had significant impacts on core beliefs, aspirations and the way new
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are approaching things. I strongly believe that
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social development has implied a variety of benefits in terms of cultural, economic and social aspects,
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we can’t deny it
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has collateral impacts in the long term. On one hand, those factors
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led new
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to prioritize their careers impacting positively
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of their financials and
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, their possibilities.
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, I find
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positive that nowadays, women have the opportunity to decide if they want to pursue a professional career which has led to their economic independence,
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their realization. Another positive factor is that new
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are rethinking and, in some cases, delaying the beginning of a family making conscious decisions towards it. Another positive factor is that new
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are engaged and investing in gaining valuable experiences out of their communities
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around the world, learning new languages, understanding other cultures, and some of them, dedicating time and resources to help environments and communities.
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of the day, we have a more prepared and conscious society,
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capable and accountable for designing their lives as they want in order to reach their fullest potential. A society
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prioritizing its wellness and the pursuit of
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individual definition of success.
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, those factors have had
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negative consequences. To mention some, our ability to establish meaningful connections and create memories with our significant ones can be compromised by living alone.
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, traditions and culture might suffer an impact when people choose to live alone
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of together as we did in the past
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because the best way to transfer and preserve our culture is by living it, and by sharing it on a daily basis with our families. Another aspect to consider
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is that it has been demonstrated that living alone might have an impact on mental health, and in the most extreme cases, lead to depression. Another negative aspect comes when women prioritize their careers leading to a decrease
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the birth rate, which ultimately in the long term, will have an impact on the economy and competitiveness of their countries. In conclusion, modern societies have been experiencing profound changes impacting their aspirations, approaches and core beliefs, and
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, their daily decisions. Living alone
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as an opportunity
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aligned with the possibilities that
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new world is providing, and we can’t deny it has brought positive development,
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negative consequences. I strongly believe that evolution is part of our history, our development and
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. I believe that we will continue focusing our efforts
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sustainable solutions to address the negative side,
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we take out the most of its benefits.

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Ensure that each paragraph clearly focuses on one main idea and flows logically to the next.
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content
You present a clear argument with a balanced view of the positive and negative aspects of living alone.
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Your introduction is strong and sets up the discussion well.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • self-reliance
  • personal development
  • sense of belonging
  • loneliness
  • isolation
  • mental health
  • financial stress
  • cultural shifts
  • social norms
  • fulfillment
  • community values
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