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IELTS Cambridge Book 18 General Training Writing Practice Test 1 with Sample Answers and Free PDF Download. IELTS 18 General Training Writing Practice Test 1, Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project they are doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Say how important New Year is to people in your country. Describe how New Year is celebrated in your country. Explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country.

Dear
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Nena
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, I hope you're doing well! I'm writing to give you an overview of how people are celebrating New Year in my country. In my nation, New Year is really important not only for kids but
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adults
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 and elderly people. It has cultural value and religious significance.
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days
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five-day
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 festival and we call it 'Diwali'. The next day of Diwali is New Year and we invite our family members for dinner and visit
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 with
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 family. Apart from that, we exchange gifts and sweets among friends and families. I particularly like to visit
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 on that day because it is decorated with lights and various flowers. It looks really stunning and we can make a wish on that day in front of god. If you'd like, you can stay the night, and of course, feel free to bring someone along. Let me
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 if you need directions or anything else. Looking forward to seeing you soon. Best wishes, Nirali

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Add a short introduction about New Year's traditions in the world.
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Use clearer topic sentences to help the reader follow your ideas.
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Try to separate different ideas into their own paragraphs for better clarity.
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The letter has a friendly tone and shows warmth, which is great for a personal letter.
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You provided details about celebrations, which makes the letter interesting.
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