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The two maps illustrate changes that have taken place in an area from 1995 to teh present.

The two maps illustrate changes that have taken place in an area from 1995 to teh present.
The map displays the development that has been in a certain area from 1995 until the present time.
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, the town underwent significant development; new facilities were introduced,
such
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 as additional residential areas, a car park and sports fields,
while
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 the fishing port was demolished. The hotel and coffee place remained unchanged. In 1995, there was a housing area alongside a sports place on the western side of the town next to the road;
however
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, now the housing has expanded, and the sports field was converted into a restaurant. The fish market on the
south-west
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southwest
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 side was demolished and replaced with apartments. The morning fish boat in the sea was replaced with a new yacht. There was a public park in the middle, but the trees were cut down and holiday houses were constructed. The coffee shop and the hotel next to the road remained unchanged. The farmland on the upper corner of the map was replaced with golf and tennis courses, and a new car park was built on the eastern side of the town.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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