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Band 4

In some countries, people follow the latest fashion and hairstyles. In your opinion, what is influencing this? Is it a good or a bad thing?

It
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 can be no doubt that the topic of
trend catching
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trend-catching
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 is one which deserves some consideration.
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this
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 scenario has resulted from technology and globalization,
this
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 writer
belives
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believes
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this
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 is a
postive
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positive
 change
to
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for
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 societies and individuals. The most notable factor is ... ... should
also
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 be considered. On the question of whether or not
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 phenomenon is
benefitial
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beneficial
,
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 writer takes the view that ...
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 it can be seen that
this
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 issue is the outcome of 1 and 2.
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,
it is clear that
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this
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 phenomenon
is
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has
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 proved to be
overall
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 positive.

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coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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