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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided two maps illustrate a bookstore in 2000 and new.
Overall
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, the two maps compared the development
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bookstores from 2000 to now. In 2000, the core changes were in the place of the long fiction area which is located on the store roof.
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, there is a variety of facilities
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 the west side
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 as
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 art, cookery, and hobbies.
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, a non-fiction space in the west-south corner. At present, the fiction area has been separated into four blocks, which are art, cookery, fiction, and non-fiction.
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, there is a large circle table introduced in the centre of the store and a café shop in the south.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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