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Online education is as effective as traditional classroom learning. Do you agree or this agree? :v

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belief
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 that the efficiency of online-based learning is the same as
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 counterpart.
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 view is justifiable, I still oppose it
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 the following explanation. Admittedly, those who believe that distance learning runs as effectively as traditional learning may have
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 arguments. The first reason for
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 is that virtual classroom offers flexibility and accessibility.
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 could be explained that students may attend online
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 from any
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, making education accessible to those regardless of geographical or physical
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. Another argument is that internet-based learning
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 with
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 friendly.
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 will decrease the reliance
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 paper materials, contributing to reducing deforestation and waste.
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., I would argue that online education is not actually beneficial to some extent. Chief among these is that students have an inclination to witness the lack of face-to-face interactions. Students will suffer from the feeling of isolation
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 the absence of peers and instructors, thereby hindering them from the development of essential social and communication skills. Another point to make is the increased susceptibility to distractions.
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 diversion will take place in settings with the external disturbance
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 as household noise and social media,for it may divert student's attention. In conclusion, it is undeniable that online learning is as effective as traditional
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.
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, I do not support
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 view given the above reasons.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and emphasize it in the conclusion.
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Use more linking words like 'firstly' or 'also' to help the reader follow your ideas.
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Add more specific examples to support your views, such as studies or personal experiences.
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You presented both sides of the argument, showing a good understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion sums up your viewpoint clearly.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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