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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. https://writing9.com/_next/image?url=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.writing9.com%2Fc6b1a9f0eebaf1397286967cd60d9673.png&w=1080&q=75

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. https://writing9.com/_next/image?url=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.writing9.com%2Fc6b1a9f0eebaf1397286967cd60d9673.png&w=1080&q=75
The maps illustrate
land
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the land
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 of the town
that
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is
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apply
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currently
exist
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exists
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 and future planned development. Generally speaking,
bridge
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a bridge
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 was constructed through the river and
town
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the town
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 significantly rose in scale. In
map
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the map
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 with
current
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the current
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 area, it is seen
a
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as a
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simple construction,
few
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a few
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buildings
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 and a line that goes to
right
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the right
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. In
map
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the map
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 with future development, changes are instantly noticed, first of
all
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all,
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 it's
bridge
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the bridge
a bridge
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 that goes through the river, four named
buildings
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 were added and
path
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the path
a path
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 that
as
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is as
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 long as
path
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the path
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 to
right
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the right
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, but half. First of all,
bridge
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a bridge
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 was added with a building in front of it.
Then
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, looking at
the
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apply
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downtown, four
buildings
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 were built
that
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apply
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are playground,
school
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a school
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, shops and
medical
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a medical
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 centre. Next point,
additional
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an additional
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 path was added, not so long as
right
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the right
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 way, but half long, it goes left, with some added living
buildings
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, and now it counts eleven,
while
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 in
current
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the current
a current
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 map it is only eight. Final point, most unnoticeable detail,
road
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the road
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 to town got round way

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Vocabulary: Replace the words buildings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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