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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiene.

In recent years, the debate has
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 on the importance of a decent personality is significantly appreciated in today's society. In comparison, others claim that school is the place where they should learn to become valuable members. The following essay will clarify these viewpoints. On the one hand, it is imperative to recognize that individuals should appreciate the substantial benefits of
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 the first place for
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 to learn, so
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 should
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 good behaviour in them as their behaviour mirrors that of their
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. A pivotal point to consider is that
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 will learn from how their
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 behave with each other and with others or more precisely how to handle conflicts, with dignity and restraint or by losing one's temper, how to tolerate and resolve differences of opinion and how to express oneself in different communities.
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 can learn to cope with failure when they find
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 who are not discouraged when they stumble.
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, it is crucial to examine the opposing viewpoint
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 as how to deal with difficult problems. A noteworthy factor to consider is
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the importance of fighting back, and self-awareness.
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, it is essential to underscore that
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' attitudes and habits can affect how their
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 see the world. In conclusion,
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 learn many important things from their
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, including skills and values. I firmly believe that
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 are the first and most important people in shaping their
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's character and development.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. It should show your position on both sides of the argument.
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Use linking words and phrases like 'firstly', 'however', and 'in conclusion' to help the flow of ideas.
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Provide a few more detailed examples to fully support your points. Clear examples can make your argument stronger.
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Your essay addresses both sides of the debate, which is important for this type of question.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear conclusion that summarizes your main opinion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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