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Some people believe that a single language should be adopted globally to facilitate international communication and understanding. Others say that this would lead to a loss of culture and identity. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

It has long been recognized that when
people
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 who speak different languages meet there can be misunderstandings. Clearly, a common
language
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 helps to make communication and understanding easier.
However
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, many
people
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 believe that if a common
language
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 were used,
this
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 might lead to a loss of cultural
identity
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, since
language
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 and
culture
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 are strongly connected.   I think that the first point of view is becoming outdated, in the sense that
English
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 is being adopted as a common international
language
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.
However
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, there is no reason why
this
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 should mean that other languages are not used. If
people
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 who speak different languages decide to
use
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 a common
language
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 other than
English
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,
that is
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 their choice. The most important thing is that they agree on which
language
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 to
use
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. Having said that,
English
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 is the most likely common
language
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 to be adopted since it is the native tongue of so many
people
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 and, more importantly, it is being learnt as a second
language
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 in almost every country.   I am not convinced by those who argue that the
use
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 of a common
language
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,
such
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 as
English
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, leads to a loss of
culture
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 and
identity
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. Cultures are not things that remain constant over the years. They change. I do not see French
culture
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 disappearing as young French
people
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use
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 certain
English
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 words in their everyday lives. I do not see Chinese
culture
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 collapsing as an increasing number of Chinese
people
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 learn
English
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.   In conclusion, the
use
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 of a single common
language
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 has advantages, but I do not think that it is necessary to impose one on everyone. I disagree with those who claim it leads to a loss of
culture
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 and
identity
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.
People
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 have shown for centuries that they can
use
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 a common
language
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 other than their own without losing their cultural
identity
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.

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task achievement
Your essay presents clear ideas and arguments, but try to use more examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
You have a good structure with clear introduction and conclusion, but make sure each paragraph clearly focuses on one main idea.
structure
The introduction clearly presents the topic and the two points of view.
structure
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main ideas and states your opinion clearly.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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