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Many students today study abroad for part or full of course . Although it has got many benefits for individual students ,it also has disadvantages. To what extent you agree or disagree.

Many Students see that studying abroad is the best way to build their
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,it's very important for them to get more experience and engage with different people from many countries. From my point of view,I see Studying abroad gives opportunities to numerous Students and helps them build their projects whether they need to study for an Undergraduate,Master or PhD degree,
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,many countries help students to work part-time
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 studying,and
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 provide them with a quiet environment to study well,
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, studying abroad for part or full of course has been a great decision for many people during their studying journey,
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,my cousin has studied in Germany and became a tireless doctor who never feels stressed to help his community and gives them free treatment,he gained a lot of benefits from his studying in Germany by building his
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 and learning the German language,and
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 he built his
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 and became a professional person entire his area,By all means,he still doing a great job by supporting his family. I truly agree with studying abroad because it's a great thing that you might do to enhance your
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 and learn distinct languages, It could give you a lot of opportunities to gain whatever you want,and to be honest,it will help you to dive into various cultures and make beautiful friendships
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 of studying in your homeland. The main reason that I disagree with studying in your homeland is you might finish your degree without any achievements or skills that will contribute to building yourself and making you stronger,but you have to study in your country if it has strong universities to be able to work in many countries after graduation time. In conclusion,everyone knows what's good for him,but usually, you have to mind your steps before you get started

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion. It helps the reader understand your position from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas better. Each paragraph should focus on one main point and be connected to your overall argument.
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Use clearer transitions between your ideas. Words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' can help guide the reader through your essay.
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Check your conclusion to ensure it summarizes your key points and restates your opinion clearly.
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You provide personal examples which make your argument stronger and easier to relate to.
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Your enthusiasm for studying abroad is clear, which is a good way to engage the reader.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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