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You recently finished studying at a university in another country where you shared a house with a fellow student. Something urgent came up while your housemate was away on a short trip and you had to leave without saying goodbye. Write to your housemate. In your letter Apologize for leaving without saying goodbye. Explain why you had to leave.

Dear Ali How are you? I am sorry about leaving without a goodbye. My father called me and told me that unfortunately, my mother had a heart attack so I was forced rapidly to go behind them but now, thank God, the doctors said it wasn't a serious problem, and
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, she'll get back on her feet soon. By the way, I hope you show some money that I put on the fridge for bills. I can't come back to gather my facilities until Friday so if you can send just my laptop by bus, I'll give it from the terminal. By the way, Hesam called and invited us to his birthday party next Monday. It's a final chance for me to see Rose. She is my crush and I think that I can hit her on. She is so beautiful girl and I love her so much. I always see her in my sleep but I don’t know how I do and I can't wait until that day. I need your help in
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 matter. Regards Mohammadreza

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coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraphs to separate different ideas. For example, have one paragraph for the apology and another for the explanation.
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Make sure your tone is friendly but also respectful, especially when discussing serious issues.
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Consider providing more details about how you feel about your mother’s health; it adds depth to your response.
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You expressed your feelings and explained your situation well, showing you care about your housemate's understanding.
coherence and cohesion
Your invitation to the party adds a personal touch and shows a sense of connection with your housemate.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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