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The internet is an amazing invention which has changed society. Many people believe that it has been all positive. Others believe that it has caused problems. Give the advantages and disadvantages of using the internet.

The world has drastically changed and that includes technology. Many
people
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 claim that the
internet
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 has changed life for the
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. Others believe that it has created some serious problems.
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 examine both the
advantges
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advantages
 and
disadvantges
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disadvantages
 of the
internet
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. There are many advantages to the
Internet
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. Using the
internet
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 can help
people
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 in many different ways.
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it can help with research, homework, and learning new facts.
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, it benefited and saved many
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's lives.
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it made school life much easier and organized. The
Internet
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 helped doctors to find the cure for life-threatening diseases.
People
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 tend to spend hours surfing the
internet
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 to increase their knowledge
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 playing games.
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, it helped
people
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 connect with each other, it made them more social and call each other from a distance.
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, there are
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 some disadvantages to the
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internet
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. First, the
internet
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 is a huge waste of time.
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, it can make
people
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 stay at home playing video games for hours nonstop. Most of the users of games are especially for kids.
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it can lead to serious health problems. An example of
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 is the back pain, and neck pain that many
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 complain about .
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, identity theft and hacking
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 created chaos and personal violation problems.
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, professional hackers can steal credit card numbers
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 violate email addresses. In conclusion, the
internet
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 has multiple advantages. It ranges from entertainment to business and many other benefits.
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, the
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also
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 has some serious disadvantages which can negatively impact
people
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's lives.

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general
Make sure to spell CHECK words carefully (e.g. 'will' instead of 'willl' and 'advantages' instead of 'advantges').
specific
Try to give more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention some online learning platforms.
coherence
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs to improve flow and clarity.
positive
The essay covers both advantages and disadvantages of the internet, which is important for the task.
positive
The introduction clearly states the main idea of the essay.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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