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Some people feel that with the rise of artificial intelligence, computers and robots will take over the roles of teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays,
people
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 believe that artificial
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, computers and robots will do
teachers
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'
function
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. I disagree with
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 statement because
teachers
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 very important profession which needs
people
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's help and artificial
intelligence
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 doesn't have any emotion.
Teachers
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 very important job and they need
people
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's help because only
people
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 can teach and give all their energy to teaching children or teenagers. Artificial
intelligence
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 doesn’t have emotions and feelings; artificial
intelligence
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 can try to copy
people
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’s emotions but
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 can understand
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. They can’t understand kids' emotions , Only other
people
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 can understand them.
To conclude
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, artificial
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, robots or computers can’t take over
teachers
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' jobs.
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irreplaceable
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an irreplaceable
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 job and it needs
people
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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