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The graph below shows the number of immigrants to three countries from 1990 to 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of immigrants to three countries from 1990 to 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information on how many people moved to the USA,
Canada
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, and
Australia
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 between 1990 and 2001.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 a majority of individuals preferred to settle in the USA
while
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 a small number of migrants were interested in moving to
Australia
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. In 1991, the population of
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 consisting of immigrants accounted for 200
thousand
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 and 150
thousand
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, respectively.
Additionally
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, till 1993, there was no
further
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 migration to
Australia
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whereas
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 there was a slight increase in the commutation of other nationalists to
Canada
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 till 1994. In the next
year
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, the nation experienced a decline in tourist arrivals to two lakh and remained constant until 1999 followed by a significant increase in tourism in the
last
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year
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 to over four lakh.
On the other hand
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, the trend of moving to
Australia
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 was not popular among nations and ended up with approximately 200
thousand
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 migrants which was similar in the initial
year
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.
Furthermore
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, the United States of America was
highest
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the highest
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 ranked in attracting residents from other countries throughout the period. In the first
year
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, the population of migrants was 1400
thousand
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 which rose to 1800 in 1992.
In contrast
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, there was a dramatic decline in tourism in
Canada
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 till 1996 which
further
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 advanced slightly in 1997 and simultaneously dropped in the upcoming years and reached 75 lakh in 2001.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, australia, thousand, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immigration trends
  • significant increase/decrease
  • fluctuation
  • steadily
  • sharp spike/drop
  • over the given period
  • comparative analysis
  • growth pattern
  • immigrant numbers
  • variations
  • main features
  • highlighting
  • stark differences
  • overall trends
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