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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Abortion
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 is becoming more prevalent globally, making it one of the most contentious and divisive issues.
While
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 many people, including myself, believe that
abortion
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 should be legalized, others oppose it. In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss both views and elaborate on my viewpoint. Those who oppose
abortion
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 legalization say that even in the early stages of
pregnancy
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, life is developed and that
abortion
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 would result in killing a human being.
According to
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 research, the fetus begins to grow as early as the first week of
pregnancy
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. To
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 advocates,
abortion
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 would
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 imply the annihilation of an existing form of life.
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, they feel that
abortion
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 is the root cause of several health problems in
women
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. Following
abortion
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, they become physically and emotionally ill. Some argue that spewing
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 action is completely against our culture and should be prohibited in society.
However
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, others believe that
abortion
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 should be legalized, allowing
women
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 the right to choose. The
pregnancy
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 is sometimes the consequence of rape, and other times the lady is in an abusive relationship. In either instance, if a woman thinks she does not want the child, she should be able to terminate it. There has
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 been a rise in
women
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 who do not desire children throughout the years. So, only
women
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 who can raise their children in a healthy and loving atmosphere should give birth. Bringing a child into
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 world, knowing that one will be unable to provide it with a healthy and happy upbringing, is a greater crime than murdering it in the womb.
Abortion
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 should be allowed everywhere for these reasons. In conclusion,
abortion
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 is a very contentious issue, with arguments both for and against it.
Women
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, in my opinion, should have the freedom to terminate a
pregnancy
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 when they want.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to maintain a clear and logical structure throughout your essay. Your introduction set a good tone, and you provided a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument.
Task Achievement
Support your main points with more specific examples or evidence. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
Task Achievement
Work on providing more concrete examples from real life or statistics to back up your arguments. This makes your essay more persuasive and engaging.
Coherence and Cohesion
Be cautious with broad statements that lack specificity. Try to provide more nuanced arguments that consider different viewpoints.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bodily autonomy
  • Women’s rights
  • Health risks
  • Socio-economic challenges
  • Ethical duty
  • Illegal abortions
  • Moral and ethical considerations
  • Fetus's right to life
  • Psychological consequences
  • Emotional consequences
  • Societal impact
  • Time limitations
  • Mandatory counseling
  • Legal status
  • Abortion rates
  • Women's health
  • Anecdotal evidence
  • Human element
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