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Band 4

You have ordered a product on a website and received a different product. Write a letter to the company. In your letter 1. Describe the product you ordered 2. Explain why you aren’t satisfied with the product you received 3. Let them know what actions you expect them to take

Nobody can deny that the world is facing many problems, especially the environment, a portion of people say
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 most important,
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 others say there are more critical
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. I totally agree with the second view and I will discuss both views before reaching a conclusion.
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 with, the nations who think that the decrease of a specific kind of plants or animals,
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need more balance to the globe. To clarify, decreasing the green areas means less oxygen. One more reason the extinction of some fauna may lead to an increase in wildlife, which will attack humans.
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, a shortage of some plants may affect human health,
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, people will need many vitamins and minerals.
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, others believe that there are more essential
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 like global warming, deforestation and lack of water supply. To illustrate, the increasing
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the
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global temperature has many impacts,
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, the deforestation and increase
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 carbon dioxide. Those
issues
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 should be avoided as soon as possible,
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, millions of mankind will die.
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, a lack of water supply will lead to starvation and many nations will have major healthcare
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. Persuasively, there are many challenges that we have to take
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our
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consideration like global warming and water supply more critical than the loss of specific kinds of animals and plants, and we should find very fast solutions to all these obstacles in the near future and it is better to do more and more researches on those subjects.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs each focus on one main idea to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Add a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your arguments.
task achievement
Provide more specific reasons or examples to support your views.
task achievement
You have identified important environmental issues clearly.
coherence and cohesion
The comparison between different views is a good approach.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • order confirmation
  • invoice
  • discrepancy
  • substitute
  • standard procedure
  • customer service
  • replacement
  • refund
  • expedite
  • defective
  • product description
  • inconvenience
  • resolution
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