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Band 7.5

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

Around the world, the trend of purchasing groceries produced abroad
instead
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 of local ones is growing significantly.
This
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 can be explained by different environmental conditions and the cost of the
products
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 themselves.
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, to boost consumption of regional
products
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, it is needed to start major advertising campaigns.
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 with, one of the main reasons for the favour of imported
food
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 is the incapacity to grow some fruits or vegetables because of the climate.
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, mangoes are usually transported from southern regions as soil and weather in northern areas cannot provide the necessary conditions for sustainable growth. Another factor for
this
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 phenomenon might be the cost price. It is likely to be cheaper to grow some vegetables in their natural environment and
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 transport them to other places, in comparison with the creation of artificial greenhouses and adding fertilizers for taste improvement in those areas. To nudge people to consume local
food
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, several measures could be implemented.
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, raising awareness about the benefits of regional
products
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 through advertising or educational campaigns may shift consumer preferences. As an example, the government can support farmers financially and develop special venues for markets and
food
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 festivals, where the nutritious substances of local
food
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 would be promoted.
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, the allocation of extra money from the budget can be sufficient for the farms’ development and renovations. Investing in agricultural research may improve the standards of quality of locally produced
food
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 and ensure the customers of its merits. In conclusion,
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 people are opting for imported
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 influenced by financial factors, there are some potential solutions,
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 as agricultural development, to enhance the intake of local
food
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.

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task achievement
Try to add more specific examples to support your arguments.
coherence
Ensure that all points are clearly linked within paragraphs to improve flow and clarity.
coherence
Consider using connecting words to create smoother transitions between sentences.
positive
Good structure with a clear introduction and conclusion.
positive
You identified key reasons for choosing imported food clearly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • novelty
  • diversity
  • perception
  • premium
  • globalization
  • cuisines
  • economic factors
  • subsidies
  • tariffs
  • competitive
  • farm-to-table
  • eco-conscious
  • consumption
  • sustainability
  • local economy
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