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You have been offered a scholarship for obtaining a distance Master's degree through distance learning at a prestigious university. One of the requirements is to take a test on site once a month. Write a letter to your current employer.In your letter: • Share the news. • Explain how this will be helpful. • Ask for permission to be absent. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………..,

Dear Mr. Satoshi, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about an education scholarship I was offered by my dream university. In order to accept that offer, I would like to seek your permission to be absent from
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 on the test days, which will be held
every
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once a month. Every year, the admission rate for Harvard University significantly decreases, as the elite university only offers its seats to the best batch of students. I have not only been offered a seat
,
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a scholarship was
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 issued. All the efforts I have put into my academic journey have
finally
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 been rewarded.
This
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 is the proudest moment of my life. Upon completing the degree, it will undoubtedly help me for better future prospects. Apart from that, the whole Master's degree programme will be conducted online, and it will be after
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 hours.
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, I will be able to allocate my time
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, and both my
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 duties
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 my academic classes will not be affected.
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, there will be an
on site
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 test once a month, most probably on a weekday. I will be eternally grateful if you can grant me
the
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permission to be absent from
work
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 on those days. If it is required, I am more than happy to
work
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 on Saturdays for those weeks. In a nutshell,
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 is a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity. I hope that the leave permission will be granted and I can pursue my dream. Best regards, Jimmy Fung

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Add a brief concluding sentence in the main body.
task achievement
The tone is polite and formal, fitting for a letter to an employer.
task achievement
You provided clear reasons for your request, making your case strong.
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