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Band 4.5

Some people think the money spent in developing the technology for space exploration is not justified. There are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some
peope
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people
belive
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believe
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 that
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 investment is necessary for developing
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austronomy technology and others though money
are
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 unnecessary
investing
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into
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 that subject. In
this
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 case, I
am
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partly
agreed
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agree
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 with
this
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 opinion and I will discuss deeply about my view of both sides. On the one hand,
space
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 exploration can help
human
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humans
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 create a new mystery treasure in history.
Firstly
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, fossil fuel materials on the Earth are going to
be
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run out in
next
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the next
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 few centuries.
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, looking for new
planet
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planets
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 are having new huge natural resources as soon as possible being really crucial nowadays.
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,
according to
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recent
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 survey in 2025, NASA has found a new planet
having
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has
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 a new resource
can
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that can
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 be used to alter nuclear energy potentially dangerous.
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, spending money
for
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on
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space
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 science objects
help
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helps
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human
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humans
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understanding
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 more about the root and
universe
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universe's
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 structure. After the booming Bigbang
are
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operated new
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space
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spaces
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 including new lives,
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and planet
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planet
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planets
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such
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 as the Earth. The search for extraterrestrial life (through the discovery of habitable planets or signals from alien civilizations) is
also
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 an important goal of
space
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 exploration, helping us better understand the possibility of life existing in the vast universe.
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, I agree with
this
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ideal
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idea
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of
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the
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that
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 other spending might be
more
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a more
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advantage
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 way to use, not fully spending on merely one stuff.
Initially
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, sharing budgets
to
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 poorer countries can give essential advocation. Because of
bad
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the bad
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 education situation in many poor countries,
prosperties
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prosperous
 nations can give them a hand to
buil
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build
 up their future.
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Furthermore
, It can show solidarity and thereby reduce poverty by investing more money
on
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in
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 other
countries
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countries'
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economy
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economies
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.
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, in 2025 Vietnam News, thanks
for
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finance
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financial
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 support from
neighbor
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neighbors
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, Lao GDP could
be increased
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increase
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 significantly in
next
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the next
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 decade. In conclusion, exploring the universe remains a vast and mysterious pursuit for human science.
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,
while
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 advancing our knowledge, it is equally important to uphold moral values and provide support to those facing challenging life circumstances.

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introduction
Make sure to clearly state your main idea in the introduction. It should show what you agree or disagree with clearly.
coherence
Use linking words better. For example, use 'firstly', 'secondly', 'however', and 'for example' to guide the reader through your points.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points. This will help to strengthen your arguments and make them clearer.
content
You show good understanding of both sides of the argument, which is important in this type of essay.
content
Your points on the potential benefits of space exploration are interesting and relevant.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • justified expenditure
  • technological advances
  • earthly concerns
  • telecommunications
  • environmental conservation
  • inspire innovation
  • diplomatic relationships
  • peaceful cooperation
  • long-term survival
  • colonization
  • commercial ventures
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