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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.
The line graph presents the
reasons
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 given in a survey for why
people
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 moved to the capital city of a certain country between 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, moving for
study
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the study
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 showed a significant increase,
while
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 moving for work was the most common reason over the given period.
In contrast
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, the total number of
people
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 citing family or friends and adventure purposes became the least popular
reasons
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. In terms of employment, the figure rose from 60,000 in 2000 to just over 90,000 in 2010, making it the leading reason to move. A similar trend can be observed in those who mentioned study purposes, where the figure doubled from around 25,000 to 50,000. Notably, in 2015, both categories – work and study – experienced the same result, accounting for approximately 85,000.
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, there was a small gap between the total number of
people
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 citing family or friends and adventure
reasons
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 between 2000 and 2005, reaching more than 10,000, with family or friends being slightly higher.
However
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, by 2010, that of
people
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 who mentioned family-related
reasons
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 increased marginally to just above 20,000 and remained constant
thereafter
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. Meanwhile, individuals who cited adventure as their main reason tended to be stable with a slight increase, recording 15,000 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • relocation
  • migration
  • employment opportunities
  • educational facilities
  • vibrant lifestyle
  • healthcare access
  • medical services
  • social connections
  • infrastructure
  • transport facilities
  • data trends
  • survey results
  • capital city
  • allure
  • motivating factor
  • influencing
  • attracting
  • analysis
  • evaluation
  • assessment
  • consideration
  • exploration
  • introduction
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