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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the current state of an industrial
area
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 in the town of Norbinton
,
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apply
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 and future plans
on
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for
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the
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its
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 development
of
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apply
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it
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apply
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.
Overall
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, all of the
factories
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 were diminished to pave the road for houses.
Playground
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Playgrounds
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, shops, a medical
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center
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centre
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 and
school
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a school
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 were introduced, making the
area
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 aimed
for
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at
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 people living. Now,
Norbinton
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the Norbinton
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 industrial
area
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 consists of a road that extends from West to East, starting from a town. It has a branch to the
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center
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centre
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 of the region with another branch to the East, all of which is surrounded by
factories
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. There is a river northern the
center
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. In the future, shops in
South-West
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the South-West
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 to the
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center
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centre
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, a medical
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center
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centre
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 to
South-East
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the South-East
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 and a path towards North-West
along with
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accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
 will be erected in
a places
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a place
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 of
factories
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. The road to the East will be expanded to its North side in the middle, to connect the middle of
region
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the region
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 with a newly built playground. The
factories
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 here will be replaced by housing as well, and the one
in
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at
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 the end of the path will
has provided
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provide
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 a place for a school. The
area
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center
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centre
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 will be continued with a path towards the North across the river, with a bridge over it, to make
a
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apply
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way for another new cluster of housing.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, factories, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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